Due Thursday, 3/26/15

posted Mar 25, 2015, 8:51 AM by Ms. Kate Hickey   [ updated Mar 25, 2015, 11:58 AM by FMHS Web Admin ]
Dear 10th grade, 

We've noticed that some thesis statements still need work. Tonight, before you write your body paragraphs, please look over the following to check your thesis, and revise if necessary.  YOUR THESIS DOESN'T NECESSARILY HAVE TO FIT INTO A FORMULA, but if it's looking like it might not work, please send us an email so that we can provide feedback! 

Remember: FIRST DRAFT IS DUE FRIDAY. WRITE AT LEAST 2 BODY PARAGRAPHS TONIGHT!

NOTES ON THESIS WRITING: 

Your thesis must answer the question, and give us some reasons for why you plan to answer that way. You can't simply say: "Kurtz is the heart of darkness." You have to tell us why or how it can be seen. In other words, you have to show that you have evidence! This can be done in a 3 part statement, or in a general thesis, but it's got to be more than just a blanket statement. 

THESIS STATEMENTS THAT WORK: 
"Mr. Kurtz is the heart of darkness, as is evidenced by ____________________________________." Then, you'd find three examples that, which support your thesis in your body paragraphs. 

"Mr Kurtz is the heart of darkness, because he __________________________, _________________________, and ________________________." Then, your body paragraphs would line up with those pieces of evidence. 

"Conrad's descriptions of African characters coney that Europeans saw Africans as _____________________________, ___________________________, and ____________________." Then, your body paragraphs would line up with those pieces of evidence. 

"Conrad's descriptions of African characters clearly show that, to Europeans, Africans were ________________________________________." Then, you'd find three examples of that, which support your thesis in your body paragraphs. 

"The reader can trust that Marlow's story is true, because throughout the text he ______________________________________________________." Then, you'd find three examples that, which support your thesis in your body paragraphs. 

"Throughout the text,  Marlow's ________________________________, ________________________________, and ________________________________ make it truly impossible to trust him as a storyteller." Then, your body paragraphs would line up with those pieces of evidence. 

THESIS STATEMENTS THAT DON'T WORK: 
"Kurtz is the heart of darkness." - Why? We need more info. 
"Marlow can't be trusted." - Why? We need more info. 
"Conrad's descriptions show the Europeans see the Africans as bad and they are bad to them." - Not descriptive enough
"There is a heart of darkness in Kurtz but the Congo is what takes him over and makes him the darkness of the light that used to be." - Huh!? Too confusing
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